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XNK5844

Posted: Sat Dec 11, 2010 7:18 pm
by jj
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The second cap appears to be of Britnee.


Re: XNK5844

Posted: Sat Dec 11, 2010 9:28 pm
by alec
I refer you to your own post on this title :)


Re: XNK5844

Posted: Sat Dec 11, 2010 9:36 pm
by jj
"In the prelude two girls briefly strip- one is Orsi Shine, the other a blonde
unknown.... ".
With reference to the pics that followed I would have read that to mean the
first girl illustrated was Orsi Shine [i.e. Britnee], the second the unknown.


Re: XNK5844

Posted: Sun Dec 12, 2010 12:26 pm
by alec
I can't think why I didn't read it like that. Maybe it was because, having recently dealt with Britnee in another title in the series, I assumed she was mentioned lower down the post. Picture now removed.

Anyway you'll have to make allowances for someone trying to speed read with poor eyesight. :)

Having said that, when you post pics of several girls in one scene / 'paragraph', it's not always clear who is who to someone familiar neither with the girls nor the title. Maybe it would be clearer to have 'sub-paragraphs' for each girl.

Re: XNK5844

Posted: Sun Dec 12, 2010 2:47 pm
by jj
> Anyway you'll have to make allowances for someone trying to speed read with
poor eyesight. :)
I always try to make allowances for your feet of clay : -)))

> ....Maybe it would be clearer to have 'sub-paragraphs' for each girl.
Point taken; sometimes, in the heat of composition, it's hard to stand outside
and see flaws that are readily apparent to others.


Re: XNK5844

Posted: Sun Dec 12, 2010 6:37 pm
by alec
Thanks in advance. :)